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Sistine Chapel

by Ellen "EJ" Sackett

Attenzione! Silenzioso! Clap! Clap! Silenzioso! The command to "keep quiet" barked repeatedly in English and Italian through the crackling loudspeaker, drowning out the gentle murmur of every language combined, as the shuffling, endless line of tourists craned their necks up with sweat dripping down, immersed in the sanctity of Michelangelo's masterpiece.

6S

Ellen "EJ" Sackett, creator of The "IT'S FOUR O'CLOCK SOMEWHERE" Club, writes "The World Around Us" for As We Are Magazine and "At Home with Ellen" for HOME. She wanted to be Oprah when she grew up, but since that job was taken, she decided to become a concert harpist instead. After a life of world travel, center stage, and harp schlepping, EJ is happiest at home, creating on her laptop. In Flames was her entry in the first 6S contest. Get to know Ellen better by visiting her website, or email her.

10 comments:

Anonymous said...

An interesting way to do 'six sentences' ej. Well done.

Quin said...

i liked this.

Granny Grammar said...

The last sentence contains a dangling phrase at the end which makes the sixth sentence read more like a fragment.

Anonymous said...

Granny Grammar is the coolest.

Ellen "EJ" Sackett, said...

Granny, I know why you say that, but it has to do with how you read it. And I punctuated this several different ways so that it wouldn't read like you hear it. They crane their necks.....,immersed....
Do you see? Tell me if I'm wrong. It was a tricky one, that's for sure! ~ ej

Sometimes they call me Kelley, sometimes Twizzle. Sometimes a lot worse. said...

Sometimes, grammar has no place in writing. Sometimes it is about expression. And I, personally, embrace fragments. Absolutely.

A very different side of your writing, ej. It's been exciting to see it.

:)

Anonymous said...

Loved this ej! Awesome writing as usual! And I love how it reads! MJ

Anonymous said...

No need to change anything, not a word, not a comma, not a thing.
I like how it reads, just as you wrote it!
Ethel

Anonymous said...

Fantastic and clever. I happen to love fragments dearly myself. Nice 6s, ej!

Terah

mgirl said...

Very cool six, ej.