by Greta Igl
What bothers her most is the inequity. That her love is an inferno; his, an unlit match. That hers is a raging hurricane; his, a few fat, halfhearted drops. She does what she can, pours her passion on him like wine from a deep vessel, but it just runs off, the pans of homemade lasagna, the thoughtful gifts for no reason, the surprise cleaning of his furry shower. Oh, he appreciates it, appreciates her, but she knows it’s in that temporary way, like a college kid appreciates his mom doing his laundry. Soon it will be time to move on, him to something brighter, something that matters, her to a lifetime of regret.
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Greta Igl enjoys writing sixes as a diversion from short stories and the two novels she's been toiling at forever. To read her self-serving blather about writing, visit her here.
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7 comments:
Oh no - she will move on, having learned that she deserves so much more and will no longer settle for anything less - at least I hope so! This was a great 6.
Thanks.
caccy46
You can bring the lasagna to our house we will appreciate it.
Good one.
Jeanette Cheezum
A well-written and thought-provoking six. Very nice detail. Great job!
Greta,
Good piece with laser-targeted similies. The ending is sad; but, like the first comment, hopefully she will move on, with this lesson in life learned: failure is in the questions that you never thought to ask. Maybe the next time, she will.
Wow...the mum in us...can't we help it? Yes, the similes are dead-on.
When he dumps her, I hope she reposses the gifts and puts the "fur" back in his shower before she leaves.
Well done! I like the "unlit match" analogy. And good luck on those novels and your other "self-serving blather"...LOL!
Joseph Lupoli
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