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The Discovery

by Chris Wasil

The moment her mind landed upon the idea, her heart ceased to pump blood and in its place pure dread rushed through her veins. The idea was that she had figured him out. And with that, scandalous images poured into her mind by the gallon and quickly filled the gaps where for weeks things hadn’t made sense. An overheard conversation, the indescribable look on his face, meaningless inconsistencies in his stories, that strange phone call. The impact of the tidal wave crashing down on her heart seemed to have no physical effect on her. She simply stood, frozen, staring right through the hotel receipt he had left in his coat pocket.

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Chris Wasil, currently in his second semester of law school, is a die-hard Mets fan. He's the author of To Die Not Laughing.

14 comments:

Anonymous said...

Have you been there?

That's exactly how it feels.

Adam J. Whitlatch said...

Uh oh... Dead man walkin!

Once again Chris doesn't disappoint. Well done.

reynolds said...

Awesome.

Joe said...

What a great story! Well done, Chris.

Allison said...

Women always know. Don't forget that!

chriswasil said...

Thanks for the positive feedback, everyone! To answer "anonymous," this did not, thankfully, come from personal experience. I've just often thought about that strange, horrifying feeling when a mystery gets solved in one giant wave of revelation. I like to call those moments "mug-dropping moments," ever since The Usual Suspects.

austere said...

Precise and right.
Fabulous.

Adam J. Whitlatch said...

Chris,

My wife and I call those "Oh, Shit Moments". :)

You should check out my Six "Fidelity"

chriswasil said...

"Fidelity" is awesome, Adam. Very powerful.

We should get the husband from your piece together with the wife from mine!

Adam J. Whitlatch said...

LoL! What an idea!

Thank you so much, Chris.

Holly said...

"meaningless inconsistencies in his stories."

That's the biggie.

Joseph Lupoli said...

What a cool concept! I don't care whether or not I win. I'll just keep submitting. And nice job, Chris!

Madam Z said...

Absolutely visceral descriptions of the effect of the discovery. I especially like "The impact of the tidal wave crashing down on her heart..." Well done!

Quin Browne said...

nicely done.

and, yes, it's exactly how you feel, right before your heart starts up again, and breaks.