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Life in the Cell

by G.M. Hakim

It's dark in here, so very dark and cold, and the rank stench begins to overwhelm me. My eleven brethren sit quietly in peace in their pits, but they are not at the front of the line; they do not see what I see each time the wicked light shines down. Although we are shackled, I feel exposed, threatened, as if I could be taken at any time. First darkness, and the smell of spoiling milk: why doesn't he remove that, the torturing wretch, rather than leave us to suffocate in its stench? Then the glare of blinding light; is it time, is it us? The hand of justice reaches in, the roof that binds us lifts, the warmth of the hand surrounds me, and then a splitting pain in my head, being ripped in half, I'm sliding, sliding, and I hit hard, my flesh searing in hot oil, and my life slips away, as I've become... scrambled.

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G.M. Hakim, author of Nature's David, is a middle school English, Journalism, and Drama teacher who is starting to find time to write again. Inspired by Six Sentences, he started two blogs in 2008: Five Word Monologues and If A, Then B.

6 comments:

Leatherdykeuk said...

Lovely piece!
I guessed 'egg' but was thrilled at the end just the same.

Baby Island said...

Oh, man. You had me working pretty hard before enough coffee.. Eggs. Funny. ;)

Madam Z said...

Mr. Hakim, you had me puzzled until the very last word, "...scrambled." Now I will never look at an egg in the same way again, but will always feel like a "torturing wretch" as I rip it in half and send its flesh to sear in hot oil. In fact, I may give up eggs altogether. But I will eagerly peruse any Six with your name on it.

Libby said...

Loved it!

Gave a little gasp of enlightenment at the end.

Well done.

Adam J. Whitlatch said...

Wow!! You, sir, are a master of misdirection... a magician of words. Fantastic. One of the best Sixes I've read this year!

GM said...

Thank you all for your kind words! It's good to know that, although I'm not making money for it, my writing is not totally a waste. Glad I could add a little spice to your days.