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Eyeball Witness

by S. Craig Renfroe, Jr.

My girlfriend can touch her eyeball. If she eases her finger toward her eyelids wide, eyebrow arched, she can keep from blinking, her finger pressed right against the moist surface of eyeball. She rolls it around. She likes to discuss our relationship this way, finger literally poked in her eye socket, like a gun to her head, because she knows it freaks me out and I’ll do anything for her to stop. Tell me you accept Jesus Christ as your Lord and Savior, she says. I close my eyes and tell her we should see other people.

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S. Craig Renfroe, Jr. is the author of the short story collection You Should Get That Looked At. He teaches writing at Queens University of Charlotte and blogs at I Don't Know What I'm Talking About.

11 comments:

Leatherdykeuk said...

That was just nasty! (Not the eyeball but the Jesus bit).

Superb 6.

Adam J. Whitlatch said...

Sadly, I know people like that.

Well done.

Baby Island said...

This is awesome. I'd break up with someone for demanding the same thing, without all the eyeball touching.. Eew.

Joe said...

Great visuals, so to speak and wordplay all throughout the story. Well done! Unqiue.

Madam Z said...

Yeah, keep your eyes closed and run like hell! Then, if she takes her finger out of her eye long enough to read this great six, maybe she'll learn something.

E.K. Hornbeck said...

It is good to see a fellow Charlottean on Six Sentences.

Does she really touch her finger to her eyeball? Ew.

Kim said...

If this was the opening of a novel -- I'd keep reading. Well done.

Ian said...

Wonderful! Made my skin crawl, and that takes some doing these days...

S. Craig Renfroe, Jr. said...

Thanks everyone for the kind comments.

Anonymous said...

If you've ever worn contact lenses then you know that touching your eyeball is really not all that big a deal. It can be germy though, so I wouldn't recommend it on a regular basis.

About the Jesus part..so the girl wanted to verify that the two of them shared the same value system, probably a good thing to verify before getting in too deep with someone. Apparently the man didn't share the same value system. End of story, a future divorce was avoided. Kudos to her for putting herself on the line, albeit in an immature way and disgustingly forceful way. Kudos to him for being honest.

Dave Erlewine said...

A bit late to the game! Fantastic work, Craig. The three things of yours I've recently read (decomP,
3:AM and this) are all top notch, hilarious. I don't feel terribly bad for the girlfiend. It's not like she's infertile or anything. David