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I Miss Us

by Richard M. Johnson

Despite the playfulness that returned to your eyes the last time we ran into each other at the yogurt shop. Despite the warm hug you gave me as we parted ways when your friends decided it was time to go. Despite my best friend asking recently, if you came to me and asked me back, would I go with you? I had to say no. I can tell neither of us has grown. Not significantly enough, over the last five years, for the old flame to reignite and flourish under the dark cloud I shiver beneath every time we are in the same room together, alone.

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Richard M. Johnson, who turned fifty-two on August 3rd, is thinking out of turn again.

7 comments:

Joe said...

Excellent

Grey Johnson said...

I felt a little frozen with your character, trapped apart, trapped together, things changing too much and not enough. Great six.

Britt said...

Richard this applies to so many relationships; love, friendship and family. Very well said!

Anonymous said...

Great job on this, because your character wasn't predictable.

Payton L. Inkletter said...

'Despite'; 'despite'; 'despite': very effective, Richard, to catch our attention and drive home the import of the no, that desolate knockback.

And investing the protagonist with the humility of acknowledging his own lack of growth is a rare touch.

Anonymous said...

We all feel this. I won't get into a major analyzation of what you wrote. But, if anyone has ever loved and lost, they know your words by heart...

Marina said...

Very impressive. It's amazing how you managed to say so much via a mere six sentences. This may just be one of those things that can be understood only when felt and I'm sure so many people can relate!