20091229

Winter

by Harry B. Sanderford

An untended Ferris wheel turns slowly against a smoke streaked sunset. The tattered sails of beached sailing ships wave cheerless gray and brown party flags over soldiers of every stripe. Ragged throngs too weary to separate by uniform sit on their helmets rolling tobacco or passing unlabeled bottles, the bitter local spoils of a global contest no longer possible to score. Some drink greedily thankful for another day, others drink just as fiercely regretting the very same thing. One soldier considers a childhood memory of snow falling on a boardwalk that no longer exists. The snow he knows will still fall, but this cannot be my life he thinks, to melt into a puddle, swirling in the gutter like so much dirty snow.

6S

Harry B. Sanderford, author of Bananas, is a Central Florida surfing cowboy who'd sooner spin yarns than mend fences.

22 comments:

Mike Whitney said...

Harry,

LOVE this, pal! Rockin' good last sentence!!

Crybbe666 said...

Harry, great to see another six-tacular story from you. Agree with Mike, fantastic last line. Superb!!!

Sugar said...

Rich imagery of a poor soldier's lament. Another great story from my fav author.

Frootz said...

Quite good.

Michael Solender said...

what could you possibly know about snow?? Neat piece hal..nice showcase for the fla cowpoke!

Madam Z said...

Beautifully written, but depressing as hell. Let's send it to all the various countries's leaders who get our soldiers into these horrible situations.

Chin up, Harry. Spring is only 82 days away.

quin browne said...

such a lovely arc from trusted reader/commenter to author of such great pieces.

Anonymous said...

I love this tender side of you.
How many of our soldiers over the years have thought the same things, just different climates.

Jeanette

Jodi MacArthur said...

Har,
Such visions you draw and emotions you evoke. Your words are magic. This so breaks my heart.

Beautiful write, my friend.

Bernard S. Jansen said...

Very good. This type of piece is easily overdone - oh, the melodrama - but I don't think you've overdone this. I give you: six-tacular!

Daniel said...

Harry, great imagery. You set the mood in the opening and carried it through to a perfect end. Nice.

Harry said...

Thanks so much everyone for all the nice comments and best wishes to all of you for a stupendous new year!

Absolutely*Kate said...

Well Mr Sanderford, you had me from the light so waveringly intense in the smoke streaked sunset and the beached sailing ships' tattered sails . . . and then, well then ~ I FELT the emotion behind the layers beneath the sensations and there -- I was meeting up with the presence of Harry B (as in B-cool as the Hal-caller says) in his glory.

Har - you make words speak deep and sad and you make me just wanta sit on the curb with 'em til somehow I can make 'em feel some better goin' on. You're a colour to read past the grey brushstrokes here. Jodi felt the heartbreak and Zelda had the solution to end wars as we know 'em and Sugar said it when she called you our fave. I swear on Foghorn Leghorn, I say, I say, I sure am proud to be in your pack o'gals.

You KNOW I saw the new dimensions lurk in this packed in snow-swirl deep ditty of yours. Go with 'em. 2010 is gonna rock wit' you, writer*man.

~ Bravo, Absolutely*Kate
(my word verification -- 'voice on'- go figure)

Bernard S. Jansen said...

Wow Absolutely, you really let fly sometimes. In a good way.

My verification word is "thearici". Roughly translated, "The Romanian Hedgehog".

Absolutely*Kate said...

Wow Bernard ... the Romanian Hedgehog is the patron saint of writers going deep ... I sure like it when Harry holds court and your inimitable wit comes up against my shy and introverted nature of scrawlin' on a worthy comment wall.

~ Absolutely*Kate

Joe said...

Great six, Harry! Great to see you back here. Reminds me a little of of Ferlinghetti's 'Coney Island of the Mind'. Just a pristine six all the way around.

Harry said...

Thanks Joe, I hadn't read the poem and went looking for it. Mr. Ferlinghetti has done a pretty good job of protecting it! I'll look it up in the library next time I'm there. Really appreciate your comments!

Katie*Girl you are the coolest and I couldn't agree more with your word verification. I say, I say, Voice On!

Bernard, I think there might be a story for you in "The Romanian Hedgehog" Good title!

Thanks again everyone!

Laurita said...

Poignant and grey - excellent work, Harry. This will stay with me today.

Paul D. Brazill said...

That's a strong, puncy and vivid six. Just the way I like em!

Ian said...

Ah, cool! Haven't been here to 6S in yonks and this greets me. Great stuff, Harry (almost Orient-noir), and I get to learn about Romanian Hedgehogs as well...

Absolutely*Kate said...

I think we're all on to something with this Romanian hedgehog thing . . . Happy New*Year / New*Decade all of you great guys! (Yep, I snuck in while Har was laughin' at Ian - we all gotta love you guys ... you too smilin' Bernard!) ~ Absolutely*Kate

Pamila Payne said...

I always knew you were holding a bundle of deep thoughts and substance behind your back. Love your humor. That being said, the weight and balance of this small piece is lovely, transcending the bleakness of your subject.