by Yvonne Eliot
They had lunch together a couple of months after the breakup. It went really well: they talked about work, mutual friends, maybe collaborating again on that writing project. For the most part, it was friendly, companionable, with only a couple of awkward moments where one or the other wasn't sure if the conversation had started to drift toward old roles, habitual intimacies which were no longer appropriate, but each time they dragged things back to safer ground, and the ambiance of casual friendship was preserved. Afterward, she gave him a quick hug, saying how glad she was they could still be friends, and that it meant a lot to her. He watched her walk away, that brief contact with her body burning through his clothes, against his skin, feeling the ghost of her mouth, her tongue, her scent, her laugh, her eyes, the way she always seemed to know what he meant even when he wasn't sure himself. Through the window of the restaurant, he saw her get into her car and start to drive off, and he finally allowed his mask to fall away, leaving nothing but his heart in his eyes.
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Yvonne Eliot loves creating watercolor lyricism and eating pumpkin pie with lots and lots of whipped cream.
20091110
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12 comments:
gutting last line.
that's a heartbreaking, but lovely piece.
Solid six. A moment well described.
Yvonne ~ Reality-written and reality bites and your last liner note ~ "he finally allowed his mask to fall away, leaving nothing but his heart in his eyes" . . . lingers still. Brava.
~ Absolutely*Kate
Lovely line of "the ghost of her mouth". Very descriptive and lyrical. Well done.
#blush#
Thank you, all.
:)
Nice capture Yvonne! I can totally relate to the man in this story.
This plays music up and down my spine. Yvonne, "good" conveys nothing and how can heartbreak be so beautiful?
Very well done - nice imagery and excellent descriptive passages! I absolutely love the last line.
You make the after taste of love something sweet and not bitter. If more ex-lovers had such sensibility and grace, there would be a lot less slashed tires and broken mirrors.
wow - i have definitely felt this before - love the last line!
A sexy piece.
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