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Saturday Night

by Janet Dale

We walk together to the front porch, and out of nowhere, she hugs me tight with both arms. I remain frozen, she tells me how it was “the best night.” Turning in toward her — those sparkling blue eyes, for a moment I consider a kiss. But instead, I scurry away to the safety of the car, she pauses to watch me go. I slide the key into the ignition and flash my headlights; she flashes the porch light back at me. Apart, we’re just two confused souls in the dark, but together we're electric.

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Janet Dale, who blogs here, is set to graduate from the University of Memphis in December with a B.A. in English (Creative Writing). She is currently researching M.F.A. programs, studying to take the GRE, and reading literary classics.

7 comments:

quin browne said...

The electric tie in works nicely....

Joe said...

Very well done.

allison said...

I love this.

katiemccullough said...

Honest and beautiful. I like.

Teresa Stenson said...

Sad and truthful, and a nice portrayal of that awkwardness. Made me think there's someone in the house waiting for her (like a spouse, not a murderer).

Editor said...

Thanks for that. Great work.

Raquel

janet said...

Quin - Thank you, electricity seemed to be throughout the piece so I decided to tie it up that way.

Joe - :o)

Allison - I'm glad!

Katie - Very honest indeed. I wish I was as brave in real life as I am in writing real life.

Teresa - That's a good take on it. Or maybe there was an approaching car?

Raquel - You're welcome.

~~J