by Janet Dale
Sitting alone at the bar in her favorite little black dress, Ginny Martin was a masterpiece suitable for framing. Men paused, stealing glances as her slender arm reached forward to accept another drink from the bartender. She tilted her head to look down at the simple gold watch encircling her wrist. Her brain began ticking off the reasons Mike would give her for not showing via a hushed telephone conversation later: one of his boys was sick, Marta made him steak for dinner, or the guilt was too much to bear. After two more drinks, she slid off the stool and opened her purse to settle the tab, but the bartender said, “It’s on the house.” After holding up her empty glass for a silent toast, she turned toward the door and went out into the night.
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Janet Dale, who blogs here, is set to graduate from the University of Memphis in December with a B.A. in English (Creative Writing). She is currently researching M.F.A. programs, studying to take the GRE, and reading literary classics.
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10 comments:
Well done. I think the strength of this six is not only in what is said, but in what is not said. Great attention to detail - real clarity and vividness in the little things that make this story stand out.
Awesome writing, Janet! I love the way you were able to get so much detail in 6 sentences...I would like some more, please!
There is great description in this six yet also great subtlety of things both said and unsaid. An awesome six!
Beautifully written. It was easy to picture this like a scene in a movie.
There is a lot "not said" or hidden in this story. I like to write moments, but I wasn't sure I had the ability to bring everything forth in only six sentences.
This was my first attempt at micro-flash. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Shorty--I pictured it all in my head too, I'm flattered you saw it all as well.
excellenté
Very filmic, very noir. Very Edward Hopper.
I'll stop the 'verys' now :)
Much enjoyed.
This is awesome J!!
easy to visualise... so, well done.
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