by Princess LadyBug
Our conversation abruptly stopped and I looked up to find him staring off into nothing with a faraway look in his eyes. My first thought was to wonder where in the universe he was; then I realized I didn't really care. It also occurred to me that he was mentally absent from our life together more than he was present. I let out a deep breath (that I felt like I'd been holding since we'd met twelve years ago) and left the kitchen. In less than thirty minutes, I'd packed everything I wanted to take with me from this life, grabbed my laptop, and headed towards the door. I only stopped long enough to erase my number from his cell phone before I exited this life and entered another.
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Princess LadyBug, who blogs here, works for a non-profit by day, but dreams of being a writer by night. Her favorite authors are Laurell K. Hamilton, Charlaine Harris, and Stephenie Meyer, but her favorite writers are her friends, Cleggy and Cormac, because they inspire her to improve.
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12 comments:
A good six and a strong ending!
Really good six - nice edge throughout and vivid details carry this from sentence to sentence. Looking forward to reading more.
KM
I was holding my breath, I realized. Great job!
Love, love, love the line about letting out a breath she'd been holding for 12 years, and crazy about the decisiveness of the last sentence. Very well written!
nice... I like the finality of deleting the number from the mobile. Ace.
No, but, though. This is proper stuff. You're good at this. Like kev, I look foward to more.
I loved this. Stopping to erase the number was priceless.Good 6.
Jeanette Cheezum
each line was crisp...
Excellent writing with a nice edge and everything else everyone said. An excellent writer here.
Great atmosphere created in such a short piece. Terrific!
Awesome job, Sweetie!! Laurell K. has nothing on you! ; )
Wow, who knew so much could be said in six little sentences. Great job Sis! I'm proud of you.
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